Draft

When you draft, you begin writing. Use the ideas you gathered in your sequence chain to begin your draft.

1. lie on stomach on floor, put toes on ground

1. lie on stomach on floor, put toes on ground

Revise

When you revise a draft, you make your writing better. Stay focused. Procedures only include important details. Take out details that are not important.

Test your focus. Have a partner follow the procedure.

Hiro’s Draft

Step 2: Next, put your hands flat on the ground. Sometimes the floor is cold. Bend your elbows.

Hiro’s partner says:

“Is the temperature of the floor important?”

Then Hiro knew he needed to make changes.

Hiro’s Revision

Step 2: Next, put your hands flat on the ground. illustration of words crossed out with proofreader's delete markillustration of words crossed out with proofreader's delete markBend your elbows.

He took out a sentence that didn’t give instructions.

Now follow these steps to revise your procedure.

  • 1 DECIDE WHAT TO CHANGE

    Read to a partner. Ask your partner to follow your procedure. See if your partner can demonstrate all the steps. Do you need to take out any text that is not important?

  • 2 MARK YOUR CHANGES

    If you need to take out text, use this mark:illustration of proofreader's deletion mark—a line that loops once around.

Reflect

  • • Did you stay focused?

  • • Can the reader follow the steps?